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Before we kissed, I never knew the taste of twilight...
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-Lightless Refrain-

I cried in the place where time drew its last breath. I once remembered its warm embrace, but the memories left me to drift in a sea of shattered dreams. The refrain of days past faded into the nothingness while I longed for the pure light of the firefly.

But as sight is lost in the sun's fiery stare, I was greeted only by a malicious shadow. Like a demonic sprite, it danced around me, and as my eyes turned green emerald tears ran free. I sensed in the shifting darkness an eternal hopelessness, and I opened myself to it.

When time lost all meaning, all time became lost. Burning recollections left me cold, as hope wept a solemn nocturne.

I was alone.

The timeless serenade of immortality died as a final listless smile crossed my tear-strewn face. The memory of life escaped my pleading hands, like Yours so long ago.

Through the icy blue window of sleep, I saw the black rain melt the world.

-Adam Morsa 5:03 PM 9-6-03
©2003-2009 ~seekingtruth
:iconseekingtruth:

Author's Comments

I know it looks like prose, but I was in my inexplicably "poem" mindset as I wrote it, you've heard this all before, :blah:blah:

Whelp, I'm afraid this is part 3 of the Firefly "series," if you will. Before you read this, read [this] and [this], in that (chronological) order. They are all very connected- assuming you see this how I do. Which you just might not- and I think that's great! You'll get no "meaning" help from me. Take what you will out of it (meaningwise, I don't mean steal my work!)

Altho it would be really cool to see if anybody could take a guess at what exactly is happening in each of the poems and tie them together somehow...:nod:

I know my little piccy is dark and hard to see. That's the point. ;)

Whatever. Enjoy, if you can =D

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:iconseekingtruth:
Whoa, crap- okay, I don't know why the piccy looks THAT freaking fuzzy. Stupid DA and their "thumbnail" thing, it makes all of my little title piccies look like crap...

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"Never apologize for showing feeling. When you do so, you apologize for truth." -Disraeli
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Thanks is nice, but a comment is better!
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:mwahaha:p|-|3412!!!:mwahaha:
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:crazy::eyepopping:Keep smiling!:stab::slow:
:iconxxxemotionalkid:
Hm... do you make the thumbnails really large?


Anyway, the picture doesn't matter. The poem though was wonderful in every aspect.

"The timeless serenade of immortality died as a final listless smile crossed my tear-strewn face. The memory of life escaped my pleading hands, like Yours so long ago. Through the icy blue window of sleep, I saw the black rain melt the world."

My favorite part, it's like you've put my feelings/emotions to paper. So beautiful, definately a +fav forever. And don't worry about the format of it (looking like prose) .. no one ever said poetry had to look a certain way, and actually the set up makes it stronger. :hug: ...

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And you find yourself on a velvet couch tasting the skin of a foreign girl. Her eyes are black and wet like oil and she ties your hands with a string of pearls.
:iconxxxemotionalkid:
Sorry for the extra comment but after rereading it there's just one thing that doesn't seem quite right. "I saw the black rain melt the world." ... I don't think the 'the' is needed. Wonderful just the same though.

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And you find yourself on a velvet couch tasting the skin of a foreign girl. Her eyes are black and wet like oil and she ties your hands with a string of pearls.
:iconlost-mister-me:
ya know, you give great titles to all your submissions. dunno if ive pointed that out or not. but its true....

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"If you can't get someone out of your head, maybe they're supposed to be there."
"She walks away and he faithfully follows."
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"nd as my eyes turned green emerald tears ran free. I sensed in the shifting darkness an eternal hopelessness, and I opened myself to it."

i love every part
they are just so amazing
and stir such emotion
it's almost overwelming...
(in a good way, dont get me wrong)

your words are so amazing

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I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped
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This is what took you FOREVER to get to my house today?!?!?!?! You bastard! Joking of course, don't get so upset, you baby. Well the title is good, but ... the rest is good too. Awesome poem. The imagery is amazing, keep it up!

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To truly love someone you must revel in their existence, because they make life all the more wonderful. -Goodkind

A comment for a comment is always appreciated!
:iconseekingtruth:
Yeah.... I noticed that after I submoitted it, and DA is being whiny about fixing poetry/prose pieces- that is, it's not working for me. Hopefully they fix all these damned bugs in DA3 soon...

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"Never apologize for showing feeling. When you do so, you apologize for truth." -Disraeli
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Thanks is nice, but a comment is better!
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:mwahaha:p|-|3412!!!:mwahaha:
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:crazy::eyepopping:Keep smiling!:stab::slow:
:iconnightwhispers:
This made me cry. Goddess.. you are such an awesome writer. I have to fave this, it hit home.. :heart:

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If I could put them in a jar
I know they wouldn't scar
I'd do it if I could
I hope you know I would
:iconseekingtruth:
:hug::hug::hug::hug:

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"Never apologize for showing feeling. When you do so, you apologize for truth." -Disraeli
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Thanks is nice, but a comment is better!
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:mwahaha:p|-|3412!!!:mwahaha:
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:crazy::eyepopping:Keep smiling!:stab::slow:

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