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Last Dance with the Fireflies by ~seekingtruth:iconseekingtruth:





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"When the smoke cleared, there were no fireflies. There was no 'him' or 'her.' Just ashes..."
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-Last Dance with the Fireflies-

Your hand was cold in mine as we walked among dying flowers, memories flowing from our eyes like shadows before an unwelcome light. Fireflies twirled around my fingertips as the stream at our feet ran red, dancing on a dream lost to reality.

We kissed - your lips were like blood. I asked why and you answered with a sad smile, your bright eyes finally letting the darkness within burn through. Beneath the starless night sky, I understood, a tiny light flitting across your face with the innocence of a homicide. My arms encircled you, and we danced to a silent song only we could ever hear. Blue and gold remembrances became forever lost in the scent of incense and dew-matted hair.

The fires surrounding us illuminated our sorrow, and we were beautiful.

The chill night wept for our beauty, consumed by lovers' despair. Through sanguine tears, you told me our poison was rooted in love. My eyes closed against pleading lights, but I opened them to you with the evening's last kiss. As we danced, the fireflies cast lengthening shadows, falling to the water and enkindling the night.

I held you to me as flames lept around us, a smoldering heart in the eyes of angels.

We burned.

Our eyes reflected passionate memories, and the smoke swallowed our shallow breaths.

In the eternal soundless instant before ashes, I heard a firefly weep for the first time.

Together, we burned.

-Adam Morsa 5:01 PM 7/10/03
©2003-2009 ~seekingtruth
:iconseekingtruth:

Author's Comments

Wrote this one in Vegas. Took a while. Tried a very different style. Please don't call it prose simply because there are no mid-sentence breaks, I wrote this as though I was writing a poem- and that is what it is.

Everything means something, but I'm leaving you on your own to interpret this however you see fit. Enjoy!

BTW... the repetition near the end is intentional ;)

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:iconbrangwen:
*stunned*

Really got nothing to say. This kind of writing is to sink into your heart, and stay there. I got chills reading it. Well done!

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:icondcmbrnite:
+favlove Fantastic imagery...the emotions just thrill through me...completely compelling.

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All things Foamy
:iconxxxemotionalkid:
simply amazing. it's written wonderfully, nothing i could think of would have made it better :) (Smile) makes me want to write something beautiful. i'm just entranced....

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And you find yourself on a velvet couch tasting the skin of a foreign girl. Her eyes are black and wet like oil and she ties your hands with a string of pearls.
:iconoptumystic:
I wouldn't make the mistake of calling it prose. It definitely flows like poetry.
The imagery was a little jumbled for me and caused confusion. :( (Sad) I'm sure there is a depth to it I didn't get and that makes me sad.
:iconalicatylon:
thats some veyr veyr lovely stuff you have here. once your read it in full, you realize tis poetry. this is a very very sad piece, with goegous emotions...

incedentaly you ever seen the anime "thew grave of fireflies?" veyr cool stuff, and this kinda remidsme of it

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doomslug of chaos! awaaayyyy!

~alicatylon
:icon-rhetoric-:
very beautiful sounding
but with the symbolism so deep
i didnt get it...
which means nothing
because it probably has a very deep meaning to you
and thats all that really matters in poetry
its the writers intention and the audiences interpretation

i thought it was a very beautifully worded poem
reminded me of davey type of writing
the emotion was tangible
i felt this poem more than read it...
very good work

:iconlost-mister-me:
wow......really good. i love the part about the "silent song that only you could hear". very nice.......+fav.

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"If you can't get someone out of your head, maybe they're supposed to be there."
"She walks away and he faithfully follows."
:iconlost-mister-me:
i left a comment and i dont think it came up....oh well. i loved the "silent song only you can hear". its very nice and powerful +fav.

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"If you can't get someone out of your head, maybe they're supposed to be there."
"She walks away and he faithfully follows."
:iconsensarealiefe:
this is pretty

Fireflies twirled around my fingertips as the stream at our feet ran red, dancing on a dream lost to reality.

very nice :) (Smile)

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