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-Eulogy of Stars-

We walked on the edge of an empty field, malicious life flowing through dreams' torrid memory. The sky was dull red, the color of dried blood. I ran my hand along a broken paintless fence, afraid or unsure of your eyes. We passed a small bird struggling against shattered wings to fly; you said it was like me, and dismissed it with a glance. I reached for your hand, and our footsteps faded with the tears of flowers.

Across a dark whispering river we saw the grey sun, bleeding into a pale distant sea like melting snow. I lowered my head and watched dead shoots pass beneath me, wondering if they had seen the stars fall. The strangled breeze carried the soft fingers of dandelions, and they clawed at my legs like a terrified child. We paused and you looked at me, expressionless, as my shadow grew wings.

I heard the solitary voice of the Nightshade, and found you in my arms. You were colder than the bleeding sky as you wept into my chest. I said "Starlight is only the breath of dreams," and the dim sun surrendered to a sightless night.

We shared a desperate, lasting kiss as we felt the world disintegrate. I held your shaking form to me while the rusty field fell around us into the sepulcher of galaxies, like rain.

There we remained, above the pit, encircled by wings.

I asked if you remembered the night we burned, and you kissed my tears.

"Always."

-Adam Morsa 11/6/03 5:39 PM
©2003-2009 ~seekingtruth
:iconseekingtruth:

Author's Comments

I call it poetry because I was in my poetry-writing mindset while I wrote it.

I meant for this to be read aloud at a certain pace, but I suppose that's up to you.

This piece feels closer to me than anything I've written for a long time.

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:icondarksubz3r0:
DUDE. THAT WAS SO AWESOME. SO MUCH EMOTION and the way it flows is awesome. It feels as though I'm there. I would say this is one of the best works of writing I have read in a VERY VERY long time. Excellent job Adam, keep up the good work. Definately a +fav.

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:iconnightwhispers:
:heart: it makes me want to cry. the depth of emotion in this is amazing. :hug: I love it.

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If I could put them in a jar
I know they wouldn't scar
I'd do it if I could
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:iconkelticangel:
Well done... :)
I don't really have much more to say on it that that, but that I like your narrative work just as much as your poetry. Keep working at it, you're going to sparkle someday. :D

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~KelticAngel

Ar n-Athair a tha air nèamh, gu naomhaichear d'ainm.
Thigeadh do rìochachd. Dèanar do thoil air an talamh, mar a nìthear air nèamh.
:iconblakpearl:
Hey! it's kinda like a sequel to Last Dance With the Fireflies!! Well done, aDAM!! :w00t!: =D
~Sarena
:iconsaro-n-mizary:
"I said " Starlight is only the breath of dreams," and the dim sun surrendered to a sightless night."

"I asked if you remembered the night we burned, and you kissed my tears.

"Always.""

dang...you are genius
i dont know what to say
this is so gorgeous
you have such a way with words
you can make a soul weep from be blinded with such beauty

great job

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I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped
:iconspazzticferret:
O_O....*bows down*....this is freakin awesome.........:boogie:


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:iconixchel:
whoa... i dunno who you're in love with.. but damn... thats some smoldering hot lava love ! WHEw.~ its like when i read the piece, i;m walking softly through my dreams.... vivid.. very vivid.. its insanely hard to create such a realistic yet so completely imaginative world... you bring red skys, melting snow, everything that shouldnt ever bet put together logically... and make it just glide through my mind.. you are so elusive to my logic, that all this craziness jsut flows ever so beautifully through my mind. Awesome piece.. imagination at its damn near finest... the only thing i'd reccomend is a slight slight grammar check... but i'm not expert.. in any case.. its fantastic
:iconsweetflower:
"Across a dark whispering river we saw the grey sun, bleeding into a pale distant sea like melting snow."

beautiful portrait wit wordz....

such emotion n depth....:)

n of course....the end...brilliant!!!

:clap:

:nod: yup this definitely deservez a fav! :)

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"The greatest thing you'll ever learn...is to love and be loved in return."
:icon-rhetoric-:
this is really beautiful
i think one of your best peices yet
definetly a +fav

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